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一、写作示例
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Jennywas a bright-eyed, pretty five-year-old girl.
Jenny worked on her chores very hard every day, and sure enough, her grandma gave her a brand-new dollar bill for her birthday. Soon Jenny had paid off the pearls. How Jenny loved those pearls! She wore them everywhereto kindergarten, bed and even when she went out with her mother to run errands.
The only time she didn't wear them was in the shower, because her mother had told her that they would turn her neck green!
Jenny had a very loving daddy.When Jenny went to bed, he would get up from his favorite chair every night and read Jenny her favorite story.
One night when he finished the story, he asked Jenny, "Hey, sweetie, do you love me?"
"Oh yes, Daddy, you know I love you," the little girl said with a warm smile.
"Well, then, give me your pearls."
"Oh! Daddy, not my pearls!" Jenny refused. "But you can have Rosy, my favorite doll.
Remember her? You gave her to me last year for my birthday. And you can have her tea party outfit, too. Okay?"
"Oh no, darling, that's okay."Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss. "Good night, little one."
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
Paragraph 1:
A week later, Jenny’s father once again asked Jenny the same question after her story...
Paragraph 2:
Another week later, when her father came in to read her a story as usual...
思维路径
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核心内容
文本主要内容为：Jenny和她妈妈经过一家杂货店的时候看见一串塑料珍珠项链，她非常喜欢，于是就要求妈妈买给她并且答应了帮妈妈做家务的方式来赚取项链钱的要求。Jenny很快就赚到了足够的钱。Jenny的爸爸非常爱她，有一天晚上，爸爸问她愿不愿意将项链送给他，但是Jenny拒绝了。
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写作思路
（1） 明确故事人物关系（characters）。故事中主要人物为小女孩Jenny，Jenny的妈妈(mother)，Jenny的外婆(Grandma)和Jenny的爸爸(father,daddy)。
（2） 理清故事主要事件(events)。Jenny和妈妈路过一家杂货店；Jenny看重一条塑料珍珠项链；Jenny答应妈妈买项链而提出的要求；Jenny每天做家务很快赚到了足够的钱；Jenny爸爸向她要这串项链，但是Jenny拒绝了。
（3） 根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展（development）。故事总体的发展应该是Jenny通过再三考虑几番抉择，最后还是把珍珠项链给了爸爸，没想到正因为如此却意外收获了一份更加珍贵的礼物。续写第一段：一周后，Jenny的爸爸再次问了Jenny相同的问题，可能是Jenny同意了将心爱的珍珠项链送给爸爸，也可能是Jenny还是不愿意
将项链送给爸爸。但是根据续写第二段开头的提示，可能Jenny拒绝了爸爸这种可能性更符合逻辑一点。续写第二段：有续写第一段的内容作为铺垫，此段的发展可能是Jenny仍然不同意将项链给爸爸，也可能是她将项链送给了爸爸，若是这种可能，则还可以在此基础上描写一些爸爸的反应，如礼尚往来，给了Jenny其他的礼物作为回报等。
（4） 结合下划线词罗列写作要点（points）。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“What did Jenny response to father’s question? Did she give the pearls to father or just refuse again? What did the father do after Jenny’s answer?等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What did the father do this time? Did he still ask the same question? Did Jenny give the pearls to her father at last? If so, what did her father do and how did he feel?等”。
参考范文
A week later, Jenny’s father once again asked Jennythe same question after her story, "Do you love me?" Jenny gave a definite answer to this question without hesitation. But when the conversation came to whether she could give her 
pearlsto her father, she refuseda second time.
Another week later, when her father came in to read her a story as usual, Jenny was sitting on her bed and her lip was trembling." Here, Daddy," she said, and held out her hand. Inside of her hand was her beloved plastic pearl necklace. She let it slip into her father's hand. At this time, her father pulled out of his pocket a bluevelvet box, and some real, genuine, beautiful pearls were just inside. He had had them all along. He was waiting for Jenny to give up the cheap stuff so he could give her the real thing. Sometimes, life is just like this: give up one thing and get another chance to receive a better thing.（除给定词外，164 words）
范文解析
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。续写两个段落开头给出句子中写了两次爸爸晚上给Jenny讲故事，提示可能性最大的情景发展应该是有两次类似的针对愿不愿意给珍珠项链的交谈。因此，第一段写了爸爸再次问Jenny愿不愿意给项链，然而这次Jenny仍然不愿意给。第二段
，如果再次写Jenny不愿意给的话文章主题就很难得到升华，因此这段中，我们将主动权转交到Jenny身上，Jenny主动将项链给了爸爸，并且父亲相应的给了她一条真的珍珠项链。最后一句话是根据这个小故事而得出的关于人生的一个小道理，从而在文章结尾处点出文章主题。
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合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据每段续写开头的提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在开始写范文前，我们首先用7个问题来构思整个文章的发展。通过对这7个问题的可能回答的排列组合，挑选出最符合逻辑的情节发展。同时，为了提升整个范文的情感目标，可以使结局适当出人意料及令人深思一点。本范文在第二段时转换了与原文相反的基调，突出了小女孩在这件事情中的主动性与转变，使得范文更有层次感。
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紧密联系原文内容
续写是在原文内容的基础上进一步对接下来发展情节的预测和描写。因此，续写的内容必须与原文紧密相关。可以在情节上承接原文，也可以用特定的细节，如人物，地点，事件等来呼应原文。如在本范文中用a second time来呼应原文中Jenny第一次拒绝爸爸的要求。
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有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段（connectives）的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了a week later和another week later来说明事件的时间顺序，用but来表示转折，用so来表因果关系。这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。
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